6.29.2012

an empty vessel, poured out
empty without your love here
vessel, your love could fill
poured love could comfort me
out here, fill me again

a real challenge in form from dVerse, a square poem read the same vertically as horizontally

An
Empty
Vessel,
Poured
Out
Empty
Without
Your
Love
here
Vessel,
Your
Love
could
Fill
Poured
Love,
Could
Comfort
Me
out
Here,
Fill
Me
again

7 comments:

Claudia said...

i like the pouring out and being filled again...always good if there's a constant movement with the vessel of love..and nice job on the form as well

rosemary mint said...

I like this. Very nice job.

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Charity said...

Thanks Claudia, traveling away from my husband is emptying, and like the empty cup, I long to be refilled!

Semaphore said...

A wonderful theme, and the flow is so palpable, with the structural repetition. Great use of the form.

Brian Miller said...

emotive...def like the symbolism in being poured out and filled...very nicely done to form as well...

Charity said...

Thanks! This comes as quite a compliment from the prompter himself!

jane hewey said...

this is lovely. it turns corners so easily in this square, makes heart-sense, and brings a smile to my lips.!