6.12.2012

Inspired by today's dVerse open mic featuring Emily Dickinson,
I've used her first line, and a/b/c/b quatrain format

The day came slow -- till Five o'clock --
When they let me out the door
By then I'd had enough of work
And dashed -- for want of more

I escaped outside -- to the garden's cover
And fragrant blooms amid the shade
Where far away from the day's toils
I decided to linger and stay

11 comments:

Buddah Moskowitz said...

You make it sound lovely and exquisite. I want a garden like that to decompress in. Loved this.

Charity said...

Thank you Mosk. My "real" garden is quite small, but I imagine it a getaway.

Really enjoyed your poem today on your father.

Brian Miller said...

the garden is a wonderful place to linger...and sets a much better pace than work...

Charity said...

..so true Brian..

Optimistic Existentialist said...

I was having a stressful morning and then reading this made me feel quite calm. Thank you :-)

Charity said...

Glad to help!
I was really surprised to enjoy the quatrain so much, I don't lean towards structure naturally.

Charity said...

Glad to help!
I was really surprised to enjoy the quatrain so much, I don't lean towards structure naturally.

Old Ollie said...

inspired piece - love the title of your blog.

liv2write2day said...

I look forward to those moments and days when we can end the busyness of our routines and sit out on the deck. Right now orioles are visiting our feeder...it's so healing.

metanoeticpoetics said...

Lovely, so concise and filled with longing and desire to be free.

Charity said...

So delighted to share the emotive through the creative, bringing healing, freedom, and refreshment to the writers who inspire me!