8.02.2012

gray strands of cigar smoke
swirled over our heads
as we sat beneath the dark sky
on a warm summer's night

swirled over our heads
lingering in lazy circles
on a warm summer's night
amid our patio garden

lingering in lazy circles
fireflies romanced, flickering dance
amid our patio garden
hypnotizing our hearts

fireflies romanced, flickering dance
and you exhaled another wispy trail
hypnotizing our hearts
with carefully rolled Connecticut leaves

an excersize in pantoum, best explained by Samuel Peralta over at dVerse

8 comments:

Kristina said...

I read your pantoum and was inspired to hop over to dVerse and see what it was about--and ended writing my own!

Claudia said...

hypnotizing our hearts
with carefully rolled Connecticut leaves...how cool is that...really like the mood here and the title fits just perfectly

Brian Miller said...

very cool imagery...love the fireflies, the lazy smoke....this has a really relaxed feel to it....really nicely done...

Charity said...

Yeah! Live that u was able to inspire, and share dVerse with you. Can't wait to read yours!

Charity said...

This is the epitome & summary of some of our most relaxing evenings.

Mary said...

Ah, I love the scene you set here in your pantoum, see clearly a lovely summer evening scene! Nice.

Semaphore said...

The pantoum lends itself well to poems which shift scenes - smoke, a garden, fireflies - and you carry this out with such a wistful, beautiful air in this poem.

Charity said...

I thought the same of this style!